Graham's Magazine, Vol. XVIII, No. 4, April 1841Various
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Graham's Magazine, Vol. XVIII, No. 4, April 1841
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Literature -- Periodicals; Literature, Modern -- 19th century -- Periodicals
His mere English is grossly defective—turgid, involved, and
ungrammatical. There is scarcely a page of “Night and Morning” upon
which a school-boy could not detect at least half a dozen instances of
faulty construction. Sentences such as this are continually
occurring—“And at last silenced, if not convinced, his eyes closed, and
the tears yet wet upon their lashes, fell asleep.” Here, strictly
speaking, it is the eyes which “fell asleep,” and which were “silent if
not convinced.” The pronoun, “he,” is wanting for the verb “fell.” The
whole would read better thus—“And at last, silent, if not convinced, he
closed his eyes, and fell asleep with the tears yet on the lashes.” It
will be seen that, besides other modifications, we have changed “upon”
into “on,” and omitted “wet” as superfluous when applied to tear; who
ever heard of a dry one? The sentence in question, which occurs at page
83, vol. 1, was the first which arrested our attention on opening the
book at random; but its errors are sufficiently illustrative of the
_character_ of those faults of phraseology in which the work abounds,
and which have arisen, not so much through carelessness, as from a
peculiar bias in the mind of the writer, leading him, per force, into
_involution_, whether here in style, or elsewhere in plot. The beauty of
simplicity is not that which can be appreciated by Mr. Bulwer; and
whatever may be the true merits of his intelligence, the merit of
luminous and precise thought is evidently not one of the number.
At page 194, vol. 1, we have this—“I am not what you seem to
suppose—exactly a swindler, certainly not a robber.” Here, to make
himself intelligible, the speaker should have repeated the words “I am
not,” before “exactly.” As it stands, the sentence does not imply that
“I am not exactly a swindler, &c.” but (if anything) that the person
addressed, imagined me to be certainly not a robber but exactly a
swindler—an implication which it was not intended to convey. Such
awkwardness in a practised writer would be inconceivable, did we not
refer in memory to that moral bias of which we have just spoken. Our
readers will of course examine the English of “Night and Morning” for
themselves. From the evidence of one or two sentences we cannot expect
them to form a judgment in the premises. Dreading indeed the suspicion
of unfairness, we had pencilled item after item for comment—but we have
abandoned the task in despair. It would be an endless labor to proceed
with examples. In fact it is folly to particularize where the blunders
would be the rule, and the grammar the exception.
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